Suncomes's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[tell her you love her]

Meaningful

That was deep. Nothing to laugh about.

I like the ambiance in general, the fact we were directly involved in the movie, not just witness of what happens. The drawing, the absence of color, the music, all was good.

Continu giving deep meaning to your flashs.

[Leina, Diamond Hunter!]

Good!

That was really good! The story was funny and the timing well set. I like the fact you used hand-made background. That haded sensibility and humour (rock hands, ^^).

Submit more!

[An Arthropod's Adventure]

Rough, but good

Your effort gave something, dear. That was rough, i mean the drawing style, but the story was good. Next time, try making something like a little fade out, or something to the sound in the end. The song endend really abruptly. I went like "Oh! Hum... ok, and... that's it?"

Hope i'll see the next flash soon. I easily can wait two more months.

[In Another Castle]

Yeah...

For a mario animation (wich is basicly not supposed to be original) it was all right. It was better than lots i've seen.

But have you thought of playing more with the pixels? What about pixelising your canon and the blood? That would look more finished.

[Okage - The Music Box]

Good

That's nice, but a bite long to start. I think that, to let people know it's a serious creation (because it is), you have two or three things to had.

Too had a loading page, go on the download section of newground, on top. You'll find preloaders's files, in fla. Follow the instruction to had it.

During the preloading time and right after it, you shoul had the title of your film, making it clear and evident. Had your name too. Be proud of your creation.

Last thing, too make your movie a movie... a mean, not a loop, you can had a stop effect at the very final frame. Look for flash didactial. They'll give you several easy-to-use codes, such as the stop one. If you don't find it, the preloader will do the job. At the end of your vid', it will automaticly return to the preloader. The button play will wait for the viewers to click on it!

Continu, dear. You have such a lot of potential. Use it well by imporving your technics.
Suncomes

Mayrune responds:

Thank you very much for your constructive review. It is my first creation so it was a learning experience.

[The Apple Situation]

Good

Your voice acting isn't this bad. It's alright, until the moment they start fighting. At this moment, the voices are less realistic. It seems just... "done because it had to be done".

If a character have to scream, make it SCREAAAAAM, and not just screaam.

Cartoon are made to be unrealistic, and it's even more the case with comic cartoon.

Though, your animation is quite nice. The faces are funny, well animated, and the moves are as fluids as they possibly can. And I got to give you a big, no, ENORMOUS point: the sound is clean. You know... no breathing in the mic, no background noise, it's clean. Congratulation!

Continu, you'll finish to get something perfect!

SirReginald responds:

Thanks for the input! My main problem with screaming is my mic is pretty sensitive and the quality gets crappy....i should probably work on that though.